Voice acting's okay, things seem well in place, but the artstyle is lacking a bit. I know, it's fairly hard to actually make a good animation, even when starting out. But, I can see something in you, and with a bit more work, you'll make it. Put a good amount of effort, be more critical with what you're doing, try to get some good mics as well, because for videos containing voiced dialogs, it's important to make the voices quite fitting to the animation.